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Band 4

Today, the life expectancy of people is much higher than before. Some people think that older should continue to be involved in the workplace. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In these
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people
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people's
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 expectancy is
more upper
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higher
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 than
the
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 past. and some people think that elder workers should be
a partners
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 in effect to their
job
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jobs
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. actually, I
desagree
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disagree
 with the idea of exist of old people in
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the enviroment
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enviroment
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environment
 of work and I believe they will be not a good help or
making
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impact
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 in the companies or any type of line sector. In

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structure
Improve logical structure by organizing the essay into clear paragraphs - introduction, body, and conclusion.
clarity
Present main points clearly and support them with examples and explanations.
grammar
Work on grammatical accuracy and word choice to better express your arguments.
thesis
The essay introduces a clear position on the topic, showing a point of view.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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