The chart below shows the average cost of monthly contract for four diﬀerent mobile (cell phones) in a European country from January to September 2002, measured in euro.

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The bar chart indicates an average payment in monthly contracts compared by four different mobiles in Europe

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, Lex,

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and Alpha between January and September of the same year.

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, the most famous mobile is

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even though the amount of numbers decreased in some periods it remained higher on average;

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been popular in at

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three years. Lex is a constant number than others contrast with Alpha which is the most unpopular.

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with, in January 2002 the highest total for mobile was the

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with around 15

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only 5

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for

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which is the lowest figure. In April the quantities of

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gradually increased nearly by 10

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;

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Mobile dropped the number to only 15

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, in September figure for

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jumped to the biggest numeral with circa 25

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and

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has a weak quotar with just close to 25

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in Jan Lex started numbering about 13

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and briefly 10

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euros

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of Alpha.

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, in the second month, the total count in Lex fell to 10

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which is close to Alpha's average. In June the figure for Alpha likely rose to approximately 15

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Lex had only 12

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, in the

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month Alpha has decreased to around 5

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average of Lex gradually grew in September Lex had close to 20

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some argue that it is good to discuss problems with others, to what extent you agree or disagree.

Some argue that the great way to bring people together from any kind of culture and age are with music