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Band 5

The news is a source of knowledge about the world. How much can we trust the journalists? What are the qualities a good journalist should have? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Although
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news
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 is the primary source of any
information’s
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information
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 about what
happened
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is happening
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 in the world, there
is
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 growing concerns about how much the
news
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 is accurate and
wheather
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whether
 they can trust
journalists
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 these days.
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One
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 the
one
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 hand ,
journalist
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 was
on
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one
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 of the most beneficial and crucial
job
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jobs
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.
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, in nowadays world people
could not
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 trust them .The main reasons behind
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 ,many channels and
journalists
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 follow certain
party
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parties
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 or government institutions as a
results
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result
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 the
news
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 will not be accurate.
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 , with social media platforms and AI the number of false
news
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rise
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 sharply with
that
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 amount of users and the availability to every individual
in addition
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 to how fast the
news
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reach
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reaches
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 many tend to
looking
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 for attention by spreading false
news
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 considering themself as a
journalists
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.
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 there are many
untrust
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untrusted
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platform
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platforms
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,
the
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apply
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good quality sources of information still exist.
One
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 of the major qualities
in
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of
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a good
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good journalists
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journalists
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 are being honest and brave,
Firstly
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honest
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 is the most significant quality
should
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any publicist to have , it
is require
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 passion , faith and recovering the truth no matter what .
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,brave
journalists
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 transfer
news
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 even in the worst situation .
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 ,many
journalist
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journalists
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 cover
one
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 of the most dangerous events
such
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 as
,
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apply
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diseases crisis like what
happen
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happened
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 during COVID-19 and wars like Motaz Alaziza ,
Palastinians
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Palestinians
Palestinian
journalist
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journalists
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 cover the war during a year of being under bombing . In conclusion, no matter how people think negatively about
news
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 and
journalists
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, it
is remain
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remains
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as
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the main source of the latest information
of
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about
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 the world .

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task response
Make sure to thoroughly develop your ideas and ensure each point is clearly linked to the central question. This will improve clarity and help your essay flow more logically. Current ideas are present but not fully developed or clear, which lowers comprehension.
coherence cohesion
Use transition words and clear paragraphing to make your arguments easier to follow. This aids in logically structuring your thoughts. Currently, while there is a structure, it's a bit difficult to follow certain parts due to abrupt transitions.
task response
You provided specific examples to illustrate your points, such as coverage during COVID-19 and the example of a Palestinian journalist.
coherence cohesion
Your introduction and conclusion are present, laying out the central argument and summarizing effectively.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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