The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The
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pie chart depicts four different locations for
dance
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classes,
whereas
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the other graph shows information about types of
dance
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classes by age groups, including
under
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those under
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11 and 11-16
years
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old, in a certain town in Australia.
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, it can be seen that private
studios
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are the most popular location for
dance
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classes,
while
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college-based
studios
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have the lowest percentage among the others.
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, ballet is the most famous
dance
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type for under 11
years
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old,
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whereas
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modern
dance
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has the highest rate among 11-16
years
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old adolescents. Moving to a more detailed analysis, the percentage of private
studios
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is the highest, accounting for 48%. The rate of school halls is higher than the rate of community halls and others, 24% and 18% respectively. The lowest percentage is college-based
studios
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at 10%. Ballet is the most popular among children who are under 11
years
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old,
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it is the least popular among 11-16 aged children, responsible for 300 and 600 participants respectively. The number of under 11 aged people participating in tap
dance
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(approximately 450) is more than 11-16 aged adolescents (about 420). Modern
dance
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is the most popular
dance
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type for 11-16 aged people, responsible for more than 500 participants.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas".
Vocabulary: Replace the words dance, years, studios with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • attending
  • currently
  • location
  • variety
  • ballet
  • hip-hop
  • contemporary
  • jazz
  • venues
  • popularity
  • attendees
  • juxtaposing
  • correlating
  • proximity
  • cultural influences
  • trends
  • anomalies
  • monopoly
  • proportion
  • distribution
  • enrollment
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