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the chart below shows the GDP growth per year for three countries between 2007 and 2010

the chart below shows the GDP growth per year for three countries between 2007 and 2010
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The data displays yearly GDP
growth
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 for three countries from 2007 to 2010.
Overall
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, every country had
reach
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reached
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 the highest
growth
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 in different
year
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years
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, and
Japan
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 made it twice in 2009 and 2010.
Firstly
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, Tunisia had declined
growth
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.
Start
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Started
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 at the highest percentage in 2007 with just over 6%,
however
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,
this
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 steadily decreased to 4,5% in 2008
,
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apply
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 and
had
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dropped to 3% in 2010.
In contrast
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,
Japan
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 had massive
growth
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 from 2% in 2007 to
doubled
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double
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 at 4,2% in 2008.
In addition
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,
Japan
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 increased to 5,2% in 2009,
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subsequently
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and subsequently
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 rose
until
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to
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 6,2% in 2010.
Subsequently
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,
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Equador
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Ecuador
 had
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a fluctuated
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fluctuated
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fluctuating
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 percentage.
First,
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the National
growth
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 was 3,1% in 2007
,
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 and eventually rose in 2008 to almost 5%.
Then
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, the
Equador
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 GDP slightly dropped to 1,2% in 2009.
Last
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, in 2010
Equador
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 rose the
growth
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 to approximately 2,2%.
Finally
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,
Japan
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 became stronger in
economic
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economics
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 because had
their
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its
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 GDP
growth
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,
while
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 Tunisia and
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Equador
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Ecuador
 were unstable
along
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for
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 four years.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "subsequently".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words growth, japan, equador with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 7 times.
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