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The tаblе and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in оnе аrеа of Britain. The tаblе shows where the mоnеу саtе from and the charts show how it was distributed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The tаblе and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in оnе аrеа of Britain. The tаblе shows where the mоnеу саtе from and the charts show how it was distributed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given table and charts illustrate figures on the police
budget
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 for 2017 and 2018 in one region of Britain. The table describes where the money
cate
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came
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 from and the charts show the proportion of how the money was spent.
Overall
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, there
were
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was
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upward
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an upward
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 trend in the
budget
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 between 2017 and 2018. Meanwhile, the percentage of the salaries (officers and staff)
was
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accounted for the highest figure in both years. Looking at the table in more detail, the largest
differences
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difference
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 was the number of the
budget
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 in local taxes from 91.2m to 102.3m.
In contrast
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, the gap
of
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 the proportion of the
budget
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 in other sources was the smallest, which was just 0.5m.
According to
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 the charts, the proportion of the salaries (officers and staff) observed a downgrade trend
by
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of
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 6%.
However
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, the percentage the technology increased to 14%.
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, the figures for buildings and transport had no changes, at still 17%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words budget with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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