The pie charts below show the frequency of snacking in children while playing electronic games. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts below show the frequency of snacking in children while playing electronic games. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The pie charts below show the frequency of snacking in children while playing electronic games. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie charts represent how frequently children have snacks during playing electronic games on
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various
devices in 2 different years, which is
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measured in percentage (2009 and 2019).
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, in 2009 snacking
while
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playing on Conventional
TV
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was extremely popular in
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comparison
with other devices,
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Tablet was the least
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widespread
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. Having
meal
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a meal
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while
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playing on
mobile
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a mobile
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phone almost doubled from 2009 to 2019. Children ate overwhelmingly rare in front of flat-screen
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TV
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TVs
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in the former year, which considerably changed in the latter. In detail, Conventional
TV
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compised
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34% in 2009, making it the most popular device in terms of frequency of snacking. After 10 years, it dropped by 30%, making
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machinery the least popular
while
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having snacks. Mobile
phone
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phones
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accounted for 15% and comprised 26% in the next decade.
Flat screen
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TV
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had
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share in 2009, but t

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words tv with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • frequency
  • dominant
  • category
  • contrast
  • trend
  • common
  • rare
  • snack
  • habits
  • patterns
  • lifestyle
  • health consciousness
  • gaming habits
  • observed
  • unexpected
  • noticeable
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