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The table and the charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britian. The table shows were the money came from and the chart show how it was distributed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write atleast 150 words.

The table and the charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britian. The table shows were the money came from and the chart show how it was distributed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write atleast 150 words.
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The presented table and pie graphs show the police budget for 2017-2018 and their spending categories in a region of
the
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Britain.
Overall
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, the greatest source of the police budget was from the national government, the amount
is
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175.5m and 177.8
m
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 respectively, followed by local taxes,
while
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 the least was from
the
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other sources. The total amount had slightly increased from 304.7
m
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 in 2017 to 318.6
m
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 in 2018. In regards
of
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to
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 money spending,
officers
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officers'
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 and staff's salaries were the largest portion,
on the other hand
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, technology consisted of the smallest.
However
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, the per
cent
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 of salaries had decreased by 6 per
cent
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in contrast
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, the tech budget had increased by 6 per
cent
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 between 2017 and 2018.
While
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,
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 the building and transport payment remained constant at 17 per
cent
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. In summary,
this
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 table and charts
informs
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 us how
change
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 the budget’s amount from its sources and expenditures tendency.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words m, cent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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