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The chart below gives information about the age of women in Australia when they gave birth to their first child in 1966, 1986 and 2006. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below gives information about the age of women in Australia when they gave birth to their first child in 1966, 1986 and 2006. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart showed the information related to the
age
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 of women in Australia when they gave birth to their first child over three periods (1966, 1986, and 2006).
Firstly
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, in 1966 the highest percentage of first-child birthing in the 19-24
age
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range
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 was around 60%, followed by the 25-30
age
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range
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, which was below 40%. the
data
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 illustrated differently for the 1986
period
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 since the first
period
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 was dominated by the 19-24
age
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range
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,
while
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 the 1986
period
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 was dominated by the 25-30
age
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range
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 which showed around 50%. the
last
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period
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 shows the 30-34
age
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range
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 dominating the first-child
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. The highest
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 shifted from the 19-24
age
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range
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 to the 30-34
age
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range
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 by the
period
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.
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, when the 30-34
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range
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 goes up, the youngest
age
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 tends to decrease over the
period
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. All in all,
data
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 explain the trend of women's
age
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range
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 change by the
period
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 of first-child birth.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 83%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words age, range, data, period with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • trend
  • societal norm
  • lifestyle change
  • predominant age group
  • economic condition
  • significant shift
  • career focus
  • family planning
  • higher education
  • workforce participation
  • comparative analysis
  • speculate
  • technological advancements
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