The figure below gave information about science qualifications hold by people in two countries.

The figure below gave information about science qualifications hold by people in two countries.
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The figure below
gave
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information about
science
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qualifications
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hold
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by people in two countries.
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, there was the largest number of people who had no
science
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qualifications
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in both countries
amoung
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among
the others
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degree
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. The
least
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percentage of those having
science
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skills
was
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and was
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master
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master's
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degree
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while
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high school students were the most common ones in two different
staes
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states
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. It was clear that a commoner without
science
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qualifications
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represented
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75 per cent and 60 per cent in Malaysia and Singapore respectively and the fewest proportion who earned
science
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qualifications
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were students graduating
in
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the Master's
degree
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at 5
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equally in both nations. Those completing the Bachelor's certificates in Singapore
accouting
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accounting
for 20
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got
science
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qualification was 1 times higher than those finishing
this
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degree
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in Malaysia
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the young Malaysia natives earning
science
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qualifications
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was the higher number at 35 per cent which is slightly different ratio compared to the teens in Singapore accounting for 40
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words science, qualifications, degree with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "figure" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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