It's generally believed that some people are born with certain talents, for instance for music and sport, and others are not. However, it's sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sports person or musician. Discuss both ideas by giving your opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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others do not .
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effects every human can
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what ever
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he wants. At the onset,there is a general
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that every child
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that eventally
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there success in mastering whatever field they
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such
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as art ,science and sport .
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,genetics play a significant
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in
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humans
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gifts and IQ levels.
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study
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that genetics on of the main
point
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points

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science
relay
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relies

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on when it comes to
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Use synonyms

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humans
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human

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feature and
behaviors
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,
i
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think
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to certain genetics or gifts that the baby
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with ,the environment surrounding them
also
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play
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a major role .
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,every
think
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be learn
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regardless
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way they gain it , if
the
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humans
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surrounded
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supporting
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them to
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their goals
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dicipline
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emerge with vision .Recent studies ,determine certain
hourse
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every
skills
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need
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to become
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such
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as
,
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the
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10,000 hours
roles
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,in order to master different kinds of arts , sports or any
another skills
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another skill
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. In conclusion,
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many believe that some
humans
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born
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with certain talents ,they should not take
this
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as an excuse for them for not
prusue
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pursue

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their goals in the same fields
with
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others .The need to improve any skill whether you gain it or you work on it
require
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efforts
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dicipline
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The essay presents both sides of the argument, showing a balanced approach.

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Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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