The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph illustrates information about the percentage of changing
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price
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prices
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in a typical month of
copper
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, nickel, and
zinc
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during
2014
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the 2014
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period.
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, the percentage of nickel
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price
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prices
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extremly
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extremely
rose and fell
down
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apply
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during
this
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year.
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,
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apply
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that of
nickle
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nickel
and
zinc
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consistently remained around a narrow range.
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Price
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The price
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of
copper
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stayed positive at
the
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a
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high point
around
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of around
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6%
on
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in
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January
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fell dramatically to around 1% by March and remained
steadily
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steady
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around 1% to -0.5%
around
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for around
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2 months
then
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droped
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dropped
sharply to -3% by June. It increased more than double and remained
constantly
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to
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apply
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around -1% until dropped slightly to -2% by October and grew back to positive around 1% by November and remained
unchange
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unchanged
until December. The percentage of
price
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changing
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changes
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of
copper
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and
zinc
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are quite narrow. That of
zinc
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rose from 1% to 3% between January and
Febuary
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February
and
then
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drop
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dropped
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steadily to around 1% by May. It fell to -1%
on
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in
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June and grew marginally to -0.5%
remained
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remaining
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at
this
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point
around
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3 months. It
droped
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dropped
to -1% again
on
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in
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October and surged to
aound
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around
2% by December. That of
copper
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fluctuated between 2% and 0% starting at 2%
on
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in
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Jan and slightly dropped to 0% in the middle of the year and rose to around 1% the month after. It remained in the bracket between -0.5% and 1.5% until the end of the year.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Replace the words price, copper, zinc with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "droped" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "fell" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 6 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 10 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • fluctuate
  • volatile
  • stability
  • peak
  • trough
  • increment
  • decrement
  • steady
  • gradual
  • sharp
  • increase
  • decrease
  • month-on-month
  • average monthly change
  • commodity
  • benchmark
  • trend
  • precipitous
  • plateau
  • significant
  • marginal
  • surge
  • dip
  • plummet
  • soar
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