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Band 2.5

In recent years many small markets have closed beacause customers travel to large shopping malls to do their shopping,is this navigation or positive

Hi
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 today I will
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give
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 my opinion about what the best for shopping
huge
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in huge
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markets
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 or small and
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 the positive and negative things. For
me
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 I prefer the big ones because you can see anything you want
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but it's probably more expensive than the small
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ones but
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,there
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 many ways of
markets
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 for
people
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moderate
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 drainage and it's up to you . Now I have talked about positive and negative things.small
markets
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 anyone can
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in
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it
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if he is rich.moderate drainage or poor it's a really good thing but,
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 big
markets
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 there
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 brands maybe you can say it's for
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rich
people
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be cause
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because
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 it's very very expensive for me it's a negative position,
people
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 now like the shows even if they haven't money that means the small malls will close because anyone like to go to the large malls There
is
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people
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life
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 means someone is rich.in the middle or poor when we talk about that I can't say if huge
markets
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 are the best or small
markets
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You have expressed your opinion clearly.
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You have addressed both positive and negative aspects of the topic.

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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