In many countries people are eating more and more unhealthy food and taking less exercise. What do you think are the causes of this problem and what can be done about it?
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couple of decades. In many nations, the consumption of unhealthy Change the article
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food
is increasing day by day and individuals are Use synonyms
taking
less physical Verb problem
doing
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exercises
. Fix the agreement mistake
exercise
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shed light on some solutions to mitigate Linking Words
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food
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contemporary
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the contemporary
people
are more workaholic and materialistic. Because of Use synonyms
this
busy Linking Words
life
they do not have that much time to prepare healthy and Add a comma
life,
nutrious
diets, which alternatively results in more Correct your spelling
nutritious
comsumption
of frozen and precooked foods. Correct your spelling
consumption
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people
think ,these types of Use synonyms
food
are easily accessible and Use synonyms
time saving
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time-saving
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minutes
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are
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health
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take
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people
are taking less exercise Use synonyms
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sedentary
their
needs. Not caring about their health, remained glued to their mobile phones using social media apps.
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of solutions, which can help Change the article
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the number
people
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a healthy
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motivate
for doing
more physical Change preposition
to do
exercises
to reduce obesity and avoid unhealthy Use synonyms
dietry
plans. Correct your spelling
diet
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a great Replace the word
it's
it is
responsabilty
of elders in Correct your spelling
responsibility
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the home
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kids about the drawbacks of eating junk or street foods outside. Parents should always teach their kids how to cook at home tasty and Correct your spelling
teach
nutrious
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nutritious
food
. They should make them aware Use synonyms
about
the bad effects of unhealthy eating habits. Despite Change preposition
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, for their physical fitness, motivation for Linking Words
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exercises
and restricted use of mobile phones will Fix the agreement mistake
exercise
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help
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.
In conclusion,it is Correct your spelling
a lot
quit
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quite
informarion
that Correct your spelling
information
people
are busy Use synonyms
in
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with
works
and have very Fix the agreement mistake
work
less
time to cook Correct word choice
little
food
at home. For their Use synonyms
needs
they always prefer to eat whatever is easily Add a comma
needs,
availble
easily. What is more, technological gadgets and indoor activities Correct your spelling
available
makes
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make
people
more Use synonyms
confertable
, Correct your spelling
comfortable
that
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which
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them Wrong verb form
lets
to
avoid Change the verb form
apply
go
out to do Change the form of the verb
going
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exercises
.Fix the agreement mistake
exercise
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