The graph below shows the average daily spending of three categories of international visitors to New Zealand from 1997 to 2017. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the average daily spending of three categories of international visitors to New Zealand from 1997 to 2017. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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This
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graph illustrates the data obtained from
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internetional
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international
travelers
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travellers
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to New Zealand and their daily
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ratio between the years 1997 to 2017.
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, all the categories experienced fluctuations.
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spendings
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spending
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for
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business
were
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the highest, visiting friends and relatives were the lowest. Looking at the data in greater detail, the biggest gap was between business and friend
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visiting
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. At the beginning of the period, the money
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for business was the highest with approximately 260
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.
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amount increased for
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years.
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, it dropped significantly to 180
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, it peaked again after 2010 and decreased rapidly. It is noticeable that
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all of the types of spending first ascended for a
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,
then
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started to decrease and had surges.
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, the figure for holiday
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rose to nearly 280
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but dropped rapidly in the middle of
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the 2000s
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to 200
dollars
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.
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, all of the categories experienced
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upward
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and
downwards
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throughout the given years.
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, except for its peak, the money
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on visiting peers and family moderately declined. In summary, every category had
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amount of money.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words dollars with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "rapidly" was used 2 times.
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