the pie charts illustrate yearly expenditure of the school in the UK in 1981, and 1991 2001.

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insurance was the lowest category in the chart

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was true for other categories

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was 2% at the beginning, it increased slightly to 5% in 1991, a figure that

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rose to 8% in 2001.

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, starting at 28% in 1981. the other workers' salary decreased to 15% in 2001.

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, it can be seen that insurance spending took

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92 words

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the pie charts illustrate yearly expenditure of the school in the UK in 1981, and 1991 2001.

Some people think a job not only provides income but also social life. Others think it is better to develop social life with people you do not work with. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

In some countries, there has been an increase in the number of parents who educate their children themselves at home instead of sending them to school. Do you think the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

Write an email to a manager hotel expressing a bad experience in a hotel. mention the following points: describe the details of the experience, ask for a compensation somehow and suggest recommendations to improve

With the rise in popularity of the internet, newspaper will soon become a thing of the past. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between citles. Others believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.