Some people argue that parents should have a strong influence on their children's choice of friends and life partners. Others believe that young people should make these decisions independently. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
relationships like choosing close friends or life partners. Meanwhile, other individuals prefer to support the young
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Ensure the essay provides a more complete response by elaborating on both viewpoints and offering a more detailed opinion.
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Provide specific examples to support the viewpoint you favor and the one you oppose.
coherence cohesion
Improve logical structure by clearly organizing your arguments and ideas within paragraphs.
coherence cohesion
Include a clear introduction and conclusion to provide the essay with a structured beginning and end.
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You've clearly identified the two differing views in the prompt.
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The essay introduces the topic succinctly and outlines an opinion.
Include an introduction and conclusion
A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.
The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.
The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:
Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation
Example:
To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported.After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.
Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:
Today's topic will be talking about Digital Communication which people often argue has a significant impact in improving communication and connection among people, on the other hand, some people believe that it has nothing to do with people's networking. This essay strongly represents the agreement that Digital Communication has huge effects on people's relationships , especially in daily life.
In the modern decades, many people believe that people are more rely on others while others think that they live in a place which is autonomous. In this essay, this writer will discuss both views and think that they depend on others rather than become independent.
Some organisations believe that their new staff are not qualified enough in some positive charachterstic points such as being cooperative to other colleagues. In recent era, due to prioritizing individuals values in compare with collective values some skills such coaporating and team working has diminished. It is a crutial accomplishment for any organisation to have successful team which the memebers are in a harmony and friendly relationship.
Current people choose their occupation based on its social value and wages, while others would rather start a career based on their desires. I completely believe that all of us should pick a career, which we are interested in, because it is the only way to be a real professional in a specific area and to find a sustainable job.
Health problems including heart disease, obesity and diabetes are becoming more widespread in developed countries. There are several reasons contributing to this problem, as well as potentially drastic long-term effects.