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Some feel that students should not have to take standardized tests in school. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Standardized tests have become common in many schools.Some people
argued
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 that we should not
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 take exams in school.
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i
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 fully disagree with
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due to
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 it helps
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students
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 develop.
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 there are many reasons why
students
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 should not have to take standardised tests in school
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the main reason is during
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 they suffer from continued stress.
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 the
preassure
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pressure
 and overthinking.
As a result
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, it can lead to depression, anxiety,health problems even suicide.
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, studies show that 50
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 of
students
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 in South Korea experience stress and depression during exam periods.
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 for these reasons, standardized testing in schools is unnecessary.
On the other hand
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,
students
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 must have to take standardized tests in school. There are a lot of
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 reasons
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this
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: first of all,
knowledge
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 of
students
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 will be well pinned and
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strengthened
.
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,
exam
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exams
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 will help to control
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students
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as well as
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easier to detect mistakes and work on them.
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, they can develop
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 step by step.
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, it is proved that
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this
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exams
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period
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 help to
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encourages
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 creativity, critical thinking, and a genuine love for learning. In conclusion,
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 hold the view that
students
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 should have regular exams, which can be beneficial for them in diverse aspects.

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Try to develop your main points more fully with detailed explanations and examples. This will help to increase the clarity and depth of your ideas.
coherence cohesion
Pay attention to ensuring that each paragraph links smoothly to the next with clear transitions to improve cohesion.
coherence cohesion
You have a clear introduction and conclusion, which helps frame your argument well.
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Some relevant examples are provided which illustrate your points, especially the reference to South Korean students.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • standardized tests
  • measure
  • abilities
  • knowledge
  • stress
  • anxiety
  • creativity
  • critical thinking
  • narrow
  • curriculum
  • alternative assessment methods
  • comprehensive evaluation
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