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The chart below gives information on the percentage of British people giving money to charity for the years 1990 and 2010. Summarise the information by selectig and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below gives information on the percentage of British people giving money to charity for the years 1990 and 2010. Summarise the information by selectig and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart illustrates the percentage of
british
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 people who gave money to charity
divaded
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divided
in
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into
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 age groups in the
years
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 1990 and 2010.
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, the graph shows that in both
years
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 there is a tendency in which from the first cluster (18-25) to the third one (36-50), the percentage increased significantly, but in the other two age groups there is not
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 a
differneces
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difference
differences
 on how much money was donated to charity.
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, we can see that the statistics
ineverted
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inverted
invested
 in all the clusters from one year to the other as in 1990
british
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British
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 people who were between 18
teen
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teens
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 to 50
years
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 old
gived
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gave
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 more money in comparison to 2010.
Nevertheless
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, it was the opposite in those who had between 51
to
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and
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 65. After taking all the details, we can conclude that in both
years
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 those who donated the most were
oldest
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the oldest
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, as persons who are in the three older age
grorup
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group
groups
 have the highest percentage.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "gave" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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