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Some people believe that the teacher has an important role to play in educational success while others think it is the student that matters discuss and give your opinion.

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society,
education
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 is the most important to everyone for future growth
while
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 some individuals believe that
teachers'
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the teachers'
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 role is most
imfortant
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important
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education
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 success
but
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some others say it is the
student
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's efforts to achieve
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success. In my opinion, the
teachers
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teacher's
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 role can influence our success and
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student
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students
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 can not
get
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achieve
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 their
desire
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 growth without
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teache
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teacher
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. To start with, faculty are the
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how
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who
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has
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have
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 whole knowledge and experience which students
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do
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 not have
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. it is the best way to get
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experience
knowledge
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and knowledge
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 from their teacher because
teacher
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the teacher
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 is the backbone of our career and
they
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the
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 heart of
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education
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the education
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 system without
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 there would be no
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 system.
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, there is another platform
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as an
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an
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internate
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Internet
 that can give you
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 of knowledge
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 you can not learn properly
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only online or
internate
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on Internet
platform
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platforms
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 you need
such
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 a tutor for sufficient
education
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.
student
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 can able to achieve their dream career alone with
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guidance
. On
other
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 hand, some of them
argues
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 that
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student
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students
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 can give
choice
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choices
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 for
job
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jobs
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 or
education
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itself
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themselves
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. it is
tottaly
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totally
 depents on students' efforts without their interest it is impossible to achieve their goals but they are unaware of how it would be possible if someone
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 them
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 they will be able to achieve their goals
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 they waste their time
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unless
thing
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things
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. In every stage of your
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 you need a professor who
teach
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 you the best of all things.
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,
although
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 it is
importan
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important
 to give your best in your growth to get your
desirer
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possition
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position
but
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you have to take a
professor
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professor's
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guidences
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guidance
guidances
 to do
best
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your best
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 in your career path.

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task achievement
Try to develop each point with more clarity and depth. Providing specific examples and clear, comprehensive ideas will strengthen your argument.
coherence cohesion
Ensure each paragraph flows logically into the next with the use of linking words and phrases to enhance readability.
task achievement
You have made a clear attempt to address both perspectives of the argument as well as your own opinion.
coherence cohesion
The essay has a clear introduction and conclusion, which frames the discussion well.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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