Some people say that in all levels of education, from primary schools to universities, too much time is spent on learning facts and not enough on learning practical skills. Do you agree or disagree?

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universities because lessons are general and academic.

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Task Response

The essay addresses the prompt by discussing the balance between factual learning and practical skills.

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Sentence 3 - Discussion
Sentence 4 - Conclusion

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

5 paragraphs

143 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

rote memorization
practical skills
adaptable skills
critical thinking
balanced approach
problem-solving
decision-making
workforce readiness
real-life challenges
technological advancements
information management
creativity hindrance
lifelong learning
skill development

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Some people say that in all levels of education, from primary schools to universities, too much time is spent on learning facts and not enough on learning practical skills. Do you agree or disagree?

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