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Band 2.5

In some places, young people find it difficult to communicate with older people. Why is this? What are the solutions? (Write at least 10 lines)

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In some places, young
people
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 find it difficult to communicate with older
people
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.
This
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 reason happens because young
people
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 and older
people
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 are different in many
way
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ways
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 like culture,Technology,language evolution and
idea
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ideas
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shape
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shaped
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 by generation experience. I would like to give you a few examples. Gen Z And Gen Alpha
people
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 like to use chat on
socials
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social
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 media and use a lot of slang words and new
word
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words
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.
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hand
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hand,
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 older
people
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 cannot understand
this
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 word
moreover
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 elders like
talk
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to talk
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 face to face or call on
phone
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the phone
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 more than use chat on social media.
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show
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shows
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 communication gaps may seem funny,but they have an impact on our society. Both young and older
people
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 need to learn from each other. As
the
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apply
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society changes, we must
to
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apply
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remain
open minded
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open-minded
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 to diverse cultures and technology to create a Society Where All generations can understand one another and get along peacefully.

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coherence and cohesion
Consider clearly introducing the topic in the first paragraph and summarizing your points in the conclusion to enhance clarity.
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Try to use more varied vocabulary and grammar structures to convey your ideas more effectively and show a wider grasp of English.
coherence and cohesion
Break long sentences into shorter ones for better readability and clarity.
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You presented relevant issues regarding communication between generations, which is an important topic.
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Your examples illustrate the differences in communication styles clearly, showing your understanding of the problem.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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