In some places, young people find it difficult to communicate with older people. Why is this? What are the solutions? (Write at least 10 lines)

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In my opinion about

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is nowadays

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apply

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teenagers always use a lot of applications on mobile

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for communication via Social media

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as Messenger ,

Instagrams

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Instagram

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and TikTok.

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why present life is less talking because life is more convenient and faster than previous life .It might be one of many reasons that made more space between children and adults. Less chatting face to face or

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much more

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on screens is the main cause of

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problem.

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, l thought that we

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change and figure out it by we should spend

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for

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sharing things with family and

freinds

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friends

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dinner

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or family members should attend more activities together and don't waste too much

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using the phone.

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coherence and cohesion

Improve the logical flow of your ideas by using clear topic sentences for each paragraph. Try to structure your response with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion.

task achievement

Work on clarity and grammar to express your ideas more clearly. For example, 'present life is less talking' should be rephrased for better understanding.

task achievement

Provide more specific examples or scenarios illustrating how technology affects communication between young people and older generations.

task achievement

You identified relevant reasons for the communication gap between young people and older individuals, such as the impact of social media.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

1 paragraphs

126 words

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In some places, young people find it difficult to communicate with older people. Why is this? What are the solutions? (Write at least 10 lines)

Include an introduction and conclusion

Although it is generally illegal, physical punishment continues in many countries. Some argue that parents should have the right to punish their children in this way. Do you agree or disagree?

You applied for a job at a company but haven't received a response yet. Write a letter to the HR department to inquire about the status of your application.

As the internet becomes more popular, newspapers are becoming a thing of the past. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Some people think that businesses should support local communities as itaoffers a chance for marketing and promotion. Others consider thatcommunities should be supported by the government, not by businesses.Discuss both views and give your opinion.