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The graph below shows the production levels of the main kinds of fuel in the UK between 1981 and 2000.

The graph below shows the production levels of the main kinds of fuel in the UK between 1981 and 2000.
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The graph below illustrates the information about producing three main kinds of fuel in the UK between 1981 and 2000.
Overall
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it is clear that
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 Petroleum and Natural gas had increased,
whereas
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 Coal's production went down. As the graph shows, starting with Petroleum. In 1981 the production of Petroleum was 90
energy
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units
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, and
then
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 in 1986 the figure increased to 140, but in 1991 the index dropped slightly to 105
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. From 1991 to 1996 the statistics went up sharply to 140 and by 2000 the figure did not change. The next fuel was Coal. In 1981 there were 80
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 of Coal,
whereas
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 the figure fell to 60 by 1986.
Then
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, the statistic decreased slowly to around 40 and 60 in 1991 and decreased until it reached 30
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 by 2000.
Finally
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, the
last
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 fuel was Natural gas. Natural gas had been produced 39 in 1981 and by 1986 the index went up to 42. From 1986 to 2000 the index increased slightly until it reached 101
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas".
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words energy, units with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "went down" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fluctuation
  • overall decline
  • depletion
  • shift in energy policies
  • global oil prices
  • extraction technology
  • cleaner energy sources
  • technological advancements
  • investment in nuclear energy
  • diversification
  • traditional fossil fuels
  • sustainable options
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