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The bar chart shows average years individuals in different age groups (25-35,35-45) can stay in one job in Europe and the USA between 1990 and 2015.

The bar chart shows average years individuals in different age groups (25-35,35-45) can stay in one job in Europe and the USA between 1990 and 2015.
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The bar chart compares the average job owning
that is
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 divided into two age categories: 25-35 and 35-45 in
Europe
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 and
USA
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the USA
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 from 1985 to 2005. The numbers are given in average
years
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 tenuring one job.
Overall
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, employees in
Europe
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 constituted more
years
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 than others in terms of working in a certain workplace for a longer time period. Looking at the information in more detail, in
Europe
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, people who are 25-35
years
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 old worked in one office for 5
years
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 in 1985.
While
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, in 2005, the number indicated 4
years
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.
According to
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 individuals who are 35-45
years
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 old, showed 7
years
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 in
Europe
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 which was more than other trends. In 2005, they represented for 6
years
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. Regarding the USA, 25-35
years
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 old people constituted 4
years
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 in 1985, meanwhile, in the next decade, they showed 3
years
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. People (35-45
years
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 old) indicated 6
years
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 (in 1985) and 5
years
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 (in 2005).
By contrast
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, in
Europe
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, individuals (25-35) indicated 4 (in 2005) and 5 (in 1985) respectively. The younger generation in
Europe
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 in 1985 represented the same number (5
years
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)
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 the older generation in the USA in 2005.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words europe, years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "indicated" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "represented" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • average years
  • age groups
  • job tenure
  • bar chart
  • comparison
  • analysis
  • trend
  • cultural factors
  • economic factors
  • job stability
  • career development
  • implications
  • regional differences
  • occupational mobility
  • workforce
  • employment patterns
  • time frame
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