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The graph below shows the quantities of goods transported in the UK between 1974 and 2002 by four different modes of transpor

The graph below shows the quantities of goods transported in the UK between 1974 and 2002 by four different modes of transpor
The line chart illustrates the four various modes of
good
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goods
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 transported in the UK for the period between 1974 and 2002.
Overall
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, all the four modes transported
was
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were
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 steady all the time with a little fluctuation
of
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in
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 rail and roads
However
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 , the road
remain
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remained
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as
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apply
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the most utilized during the given periods. At the onset ,
pipeline
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the pipeline
a pipeline
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 was the least mode used during the given period .From 1975 to 1982 the
numbers
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number
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 of goods increased from 2
million
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tonnes
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 to reach
the
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a
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 peak
with
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of
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 23
million
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tonnes
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then
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 the number
reamain
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remained
 steady
untill
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until
 2000.
While
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road
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the road
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 was the highest transported used
start
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starting
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 with 65
then
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 the number increased gradually
untill
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until
reach
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reached
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 the peak in 2000 with almost 100
million
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tonnes
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.
On the other hand
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 ,water and rail used were similar with 40
million
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tonnes
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 .Water numbers
remains
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remain
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 similar
untll
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until
 reach the peak of 63
million
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tonnes
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 in 2000,
while
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 rail modes used fluctuate between 1980 and 1997
then
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 the numbers stabilize at 40 in 2002.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words million, tonnes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remain" was used 2 times.
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