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Some people think it is better to choose friends who always have the same opinions as them. Other people believe it is good to have friends who sometimes desagree with them. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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It is considered that by some,
chosing
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choosing
friends
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 who always are on the same page with you and agree with all your opinions is the best
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 others argue that having
friends
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 who sometimes disagree with you is more better than
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 choice. From my perspective, having other thoughts about the same topic allows you to discuss all possible
side
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 of that. On the one hand, there are a range of people who believe if you have
friends
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 you should
shared
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 the same opinion because of your friendship. In their opinion, individuals who can get on well
they
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have similar
approach
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 to problems. For that reason, they should support each
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 judgement without any question. Having the chance to express your ideas can help people around you think about the other variants.
On the other hand
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, as
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human
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 all of us have different
attitude
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 about the same topic. It can be
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 example, I am fond of thinking about all sides of all matters. Maybe,
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 some reasons I can not judge in the right way and at
this
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point
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 I will need
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 point of view to show
problem
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me
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from
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 angle. Personally, I believe that, if there
is
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 no different approaches, there can not be any development. Preventing
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a wrong decision depends on your close circle
who
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 will help you expand your point of view. In conclusion,
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the meaning
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 of being a good friend is helping each other to
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right
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 decision,
otherwise
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, you can not help your
friends
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coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph has a clear central idea, supported by relevant details. The essay could be more organized to improve the logical flow of ideas.
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Use more precise and varied vocabulary to effectively convey your argument and avoid repetition. Ensure clarity in expressing ideas by using complex sentences accurately.
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Include more specific examples to illustrate the main points. Specificity helps to strengthen the arguments and make them more persuasive.
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The essay successfully presents both views on the topic and includes a personal opinion, effectively responding to the task.
coherence cohesion
A clear introduction and conclusion are present, which frames the essay well.
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The writing shows potential with a thoughtful personal perspective that adds depth to the discussion.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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