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The graph below gives information about the percentage of population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020 with predictions for 2030 and 2040 Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the features, and make comarisons where relevan

The graph below gives information about the percentage of population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020 with predictions for 2030 and 2040 Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the features, and make comarisons where relevan
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The line chart presents the proportion of
the
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residents in cities in four Asian nations between 1970 and 2020 with a predicted vision for 2030.
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, in
general
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 all the trends increased throughout the given period. Malaysia is expected to receive the highest amount of
people
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 by 2040 and
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the Philippines
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Philippines
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Philippines'
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precentage
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percentage
 had the biggest fluctuation. Philippines
people
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 started
with
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at
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 just over 30% in 1970
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 fluctuated and as it is predicted it is going to reach more than 50% in 2040 ,
while
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Thailand
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Thailand's
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 population increased gradually to receive approximately 50% by the
last
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 year . In 1970 the number of
people
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 who were living in Malaysia
were
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 few
then
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 it started to
increasing
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increase
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 till it is going to reach its peak
with
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of
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 more than 80% which is the highest of any country, Indonesian
people
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 are
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 rising starting from up to 10% ending with 60% in 2040.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 2 times.
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