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People naturally resist making changes in their lives. What kinds of problems can this cause? What solutions can you suggest?

It is natural that
people
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 avoid changes in their lives.
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 could lead to problems like being lack of resilience and missing opportunities. The most viable
solutions
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 is to use self-help resources and put
it
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them
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 into practice in order to overcome
fear
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the fear
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 of uncertainty. As
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 matter of fact
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when
people
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 resist changes, they tend to cope poorly with new challenges. To simply explain, the fewer experiences they encountered, the less know-how
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them
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they
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to
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 adapt
with
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unknown
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the unknown
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situation
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 in the future. Another problem is that
people
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 may miss the
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opportunities
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lied
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laid
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 ahead
them
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of them
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 of staying in their comfort zone. The reason is that every path will bring about new possibilities
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while
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 maintaining themselves in the same position they will never .
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, some corporate
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workers
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 refuse to move abroad or
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level up
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 for higher positions even if they could gain several benefits
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as they
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feel
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frustrate
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 with
this
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 turning point. One solution to prevent the aforementioned problems is to utilize self-help resources
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 as books or
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podcasts
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for guiding
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to guide
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appropriate
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an appropriate
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 mindset. It is obvious that in order to guide
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ourselves
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 attitude
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good
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 source of information just like
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 warrior with a good strategic plan. The other solution is to apply the theory
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real
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a real
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situation
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 so that we can train
ourselve
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ourselves
 to get through any
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frustration
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 In conclusion, it is undeniable that
people
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 like to resist changes in
lives
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their lives
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 which can cause two main
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problems
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:
inability
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the inability
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 to adapt
with
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to
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 new obstacles and
loss
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the loss
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 of opportunities. There are ways to solve
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 issue which are engaging with self-help materials and
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it
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them
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 in real
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.

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task achievement
Consider providing more specific examples to illustrate each problem and solution. This will strengthen your arguments and make them more relatable.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph flows logically into the next. Using more transitional phrases can help connect your ideas better.
language
Be sure to check for minor grammatical errors or awkward phrasing to improve clarity, such as "the the opportunities" and "ourselve."
coherence cohesion
You have a clear introduction and conclusion, effectively framing the essay and summarizing your points.
task achievement
The essay provides a complete response to the task, addressing both problems and solutions.
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