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The chart below shows what Anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree courses. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologists in work after five years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows what Anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree courses. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologists in work after five years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given charts and table
is showing
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show
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 information related to
antropology
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anthropology
graduates
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. The pie charts show the percentage of destination of
antropolgy
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anthropology
graduates
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,
while
Linking Words
 the table
show
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shows
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salaries
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the salaries
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 they receive after 5 years
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work
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of work
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. In conclusion, more than 52
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percent
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per cent
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 of
graduates
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has
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have
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a
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apply
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full time
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full-time
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work
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 and they have
variety
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a variety
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 number of salaries after 5 years
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work
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of work
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. The pie charts
presenting
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show
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 more than half
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graduates
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of graduates
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has
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have
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 a
full time
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full-time
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 job,
while
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other
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the other
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 48
percent
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 have
different
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a different
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 path.
Part time
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Part-time
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work
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 is the second highest destination that
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is choosen
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choosen
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chosen
 by them up to 15
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percent
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per cent
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. The lowest percentage
choosen
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chosen
 by
antropology
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anthropology
graduates
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 are
partime
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part-time
 and
post graduate
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postgraduate
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study
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studies
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 which
reach
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reaches
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at
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apply
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5
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percent
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per cent
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. The table shows 3
type
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types
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 of employment that
antropologhy
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anthropology
 students
has
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have
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: Freelance
consultant
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consultants
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, government sector, and private companies.
It's
Unnecessary verb
It
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show
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shows
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 that
in
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apply
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most of
all
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apply
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type
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the
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profession
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professions
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 have more than 100.00 salaries after they
work
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 for 5 years, which is; 40% in freelance; 50% in
governments
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government
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 sector; and 30% in private companies.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Linking words: Add more linking words.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words graduates, work, percent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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