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The graph below shows the number of international graduates from UK universities in 2000 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Balnur

The graph below shows the number of international graduates from UK universities in 2000 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Balnur
The graph below illustrates the amount of international
graduates
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 from UK universities over
5-year
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a 5-year
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 period.From 2000 to 2015.
To begin
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 with, in 2000 the highest
number
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 of
graduates
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 were from Cambridge and Oxford, about 15 each.Cardiff
also
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 showed a good result,
10
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with 10
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graduates
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 in the same year.The lowest
number
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 of international
graduates
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 in 2000 came from universities
such
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 as London,Bristol and Bath.None of them were
not
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apply
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even close to 10,putting them
last
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in
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on
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 the list.
In addition
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,in 2015 there were several good results,better than in
previous
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the previous
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 year.
For instance
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,
large
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a large
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number
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 of international
graduates
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 from Oxford and Cambridge
university
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University
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.Their indicators approximately exceeded 25.London
university
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University
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 had
good
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a good
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 result too, reaching the clear
number
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 20.Meanwhile, the other universities as Cardiff and Bath had indicators that almost
lay
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apply
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reached the 15.The lowest
number
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 of
graduates
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 belongs to
the
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apply
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Bristol University
that
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which
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 exceeded 5,making it
last
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 in the graph.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words graduates, number with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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