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The graph below shows the avergae monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the avergae monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The
prices
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 fluctuations of the three metal products are recorded in
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 graph dated 2014. The data on
X-axis
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 depict
time
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 when the information
were
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 collected in a monthly manner,
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 the log on
Y-axis
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show
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 the percentage change compared to the previous phase.
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, the highest cost variation over a one-year course belongs to the nickel. In the first two months, the value decrease was a striking 5%, even higher than the other two materials combined.
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, the most noticeable transformation happened
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 June
where
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 the digit plummeted to the bottom at -3%.
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, zinc
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 faced some ups and downs in terms of its worth. The difference,
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,
were
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 less significant than the first earth product with its maximum reach was only
at
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2,5%. Admittedly, the fiscal state of
third
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 material, namely copper, was showing the most stability
on
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 illustration with the shift
peaked
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 at only 1,5% from the
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 period.

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