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The maps below show a residential area with a park and playground in 2016 and the proposed changes for 2025 to make it safer for families and children

The maps below show a residential area with a park and playground in 2016 and the proposed changes for 2025 to make it safer for families and children
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The map illustrates the plan for the park and playground from 2016 to 2025.
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, the park became more diverse and visitor-friendly with the introduction of a range of new facilities .It is
also
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 clear that the majority of the modification took place on both sides of the garden. Focusing on the 2016 plan,
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,There was a pond in the middle to the left-hand bottom which was a bench with flowers.
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,
while
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 the flowers were in the bottom to right corner, the trees were located at the top of the park. Since
then
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,the garden has experienced significant changes.
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, Expect newly built nearby trees
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 as chairs, desks, and especially a barbecue zone to relax.
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,The flower has gone into the left wing and in its place will a bush.
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, the pond and bench remain intact, the flowers will turn into a new playground for the right-hand

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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