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The graph below shows the number of international graduates from UK universities in 2000 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Bal

The graph below shows the number of international graduates from UK universities in 2000 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Bal
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The bar chart below illustrates the
number
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 of international recipients from UK
universities
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 over a 5-year period.From 2000 to 2015.
Overall
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, there are 6
universities
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 with international degree holders.All institutes had strong improvement in 2015. London,Oxford and Cambridge
universities
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 were the leaders among the others.
To begin
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 with, in 2000 the highest
number
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 of
graduates
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 was from Cambridge and Oxford, about 15
percentage
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per cent
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 each.Cardiff
also
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 showed a good result, with 10
percentage
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per cent
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 of recipients in the same year.The lowest
number
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 of international
graduates
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 in 2000 came from
universities
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such
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 as London,Bristol and Bath.All academies did not reach
5
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the 5
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scale of ex-students.
In addition
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,in 2015 there were several good results,better than in
previous
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the previous
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 year.
Large
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A large
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number
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 of international
graduates
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 from Oxford and Cambridge
university
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University
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.Their indicators approximately exceeded 25
percent
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per cent
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.London
university
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University
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 had good
result
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results
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 too, reaching the clear 20 scale.Meanwhile, the other
universities
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 as Cardiff and Bath had indicators that reached the 15 proportion.The lowest
number
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 of
graduates
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 belongs to
the
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apply
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Bristol University
that
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which
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 exceeded 5
percent
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per cent
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,making it
last
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 in the graph.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, universities, graduates with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Trend
  • Compare
  • Fluctuations
  • Patterns
  • Implications
  • Increase
  • Decrease
  • Global events
  • International education demand
  • UK universities
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