Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programmes (15/16 years) (for example for a charity, improving the neighbourhood or teaching sports to younger children). Do you agree or disagree?

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centres. If pupils participate
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deal with any kind of challenges which they may come across in the future.
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helping others , they can
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doing community service.
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, it would be a good idea if they concentrate only
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community services is banned.
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of it they encourage learners to stay
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classes to expand their knowledge. In
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as
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communication
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as well as
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It helps children to
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tren has some negative effect on pupils including disrupt their concentration and
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to some potential health issues.

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coherence cohesion
Work on making your arguments clearer and more logically structured. Make sure each paragraph has a clear main point.
task achievement
The essay could benefit from editing for grammatical accuracy and clarity. Some sentences are difficult to understand due to errors.
task achievement
The essay acknowledges both sides of the argument regarding compulsory community service for high school students, which demonstrates critical thinking.
coherence cohesion
There's a clear attempt to structure the essay with an introduction, body, and a partial conclusion. This shows an awareness of essay structure.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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