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The graph and chart demonstrate and predict about the transports and CO2 disposal in England and Wales during the period of 2000 and 2020.

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The graph and chart demonstrate and predict
about
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the
transports
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transport
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 and CO2 disposal in England and Wales during the period
of
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between
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 2000 and 2020.
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, the column chart points out that cars, vans and trucks tend to increase emitting CO2
while
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 buses have the sign of remaining the same between 2000 and 2020. The line graph depicts the figures of vehicles during
this
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 period. In 2000, CO2 emissions from cars in England and Wales were the largest with 20
tons
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 those from buses were the smallest with nearly 10
tons
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. The number
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 trucks and vans was about 13 and exactly 15, respectively. After 20 years, the amount of CO2 disposed from cars is still expected to be the largest at more than 25
tons
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, followed by trucks with about 23
tons
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 of CO2 being emitted. Vans is expected to produce 15
tons
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 of CO2
to
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 the air. Buses are the only transport that
tend
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 to stay unchanged throughout the 20-year period. In 2000, the number of transports in England and Wales was 20 million. The figure shows the tendency to increase and is predicted to rise to more than 50 million after 20 years.

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