In many countries around the world, rural people are moving to cities, so the population in the countryside is decreasing. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

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In the modern era,
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of many countries moving towards the
cities
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, and it has been decreasing the population of
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the countryside
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. I believe that,
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it has more negatives
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there are
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positives of
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trend.
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the positive side,
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can get more employment opportunities by moving
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cities
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. In
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cities
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many kinds of employment sectors are available like as educational, medical, and so on.
people
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can easily find jobs
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their skills in these sectors.
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, there are various number of colleges and universities, which helps
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rural
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to get higher education.
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could be able to get admissions for their children in reputed educational sectors.
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the negative side, moving towards
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could lead to traffic congestion and pollution. The usage of transport vehicles on roads would be more, and it
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enhances the air pollution in the area.
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,
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could face major traffic jams and health issues. The
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could face the crisis of accommodation
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if more and more
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would settle down in the
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has
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a limited
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number of buildings and houses.
people
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could not
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properly, or they could get
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living accommodations. Afterwards, it could enhance the financial burden on
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and, expenses
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expenses
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the expenses
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of
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more than usual.
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must pay certain kinds of bills
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living in the
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and it could impact
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their budget. In conclusion, there are some positives of moving
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the
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as they can get more educational and employment opportunities, but I firmly believe that
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development has more negative aspects.

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You have successfully identified both positive and negative aspects of rural-urban migration, showing a balanced view.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • rural-to-urban migration
  • population shift
  • positive impact
  • negative impact
  • urbanization
  • job opportunities
  • access to education
  • access to healthcare
  • urban infrastructure
  • rural traditions
  • cultural heritage
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