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The line graph below shows the consumption of 4 kinds of meat in a European country from 1079 to 2004. Summarise the information and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph below shows the consumption of 4 kinds of meat in a European country from 1079 to 2004. Summarise the information and make comparisons where relevant.
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The amount of four different
kind
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kinds
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 of
meats
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meat
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 that the citizens across a European country consume is recorded in
this
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 line graph. The figures
of
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on
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 the X-axis show the year when the data were noted,
while
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 the logs on the Y-axis point out how many
grams
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 of these land and sea products were served in a meal per person per week.
Overall
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, the chicken takes the title of the most popular meat by 2024, with 250
grams
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 requested by each individual
for
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apply
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every seven days. At
first,
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it was positioned lower than the other two edibles, but the demand continued to overtake the rest as time progressed.
On the contrary
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, the least wanted item is the fish. It started at the bottom at a little over fifty
grams
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 and experienced a continuous downhill.
On the other hand
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, the beef
also
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 went through a significant decrease in the illustration. In the beginning, the digit showed that
past
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the past
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 200
grams
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 of products were consumed by one buyer weekly.
However
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, the state went on to plummet, sinking to 100
grams
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 by the
last
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 period.
Last
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 but not least, the lamb
also
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 went
thorugh
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through
 some fluctuations in the picture. It began with 150
grams
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 and is now evidently anchored at the third position.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, last".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words grams with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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