The only way to improve safety on our road is to give stricter punishments to driving offenses. To what extent, do you agree or disagree?

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safety has become an indispensable issue. Many ways are already taken to improve it,

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we still can find the driving

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agree

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that giving a stricter

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punishment

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way

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to reduce these offenses.

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is not the only

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to do so, there are some

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that

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writing will explore how the higher punishment will work

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will highlight why

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. Stricter sanctions in navigating violence

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possibly force people to have

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compliant driving behaviour.

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high speed

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in a school area

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will lead

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it. It is

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often avoid

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a huge cost. So that, they will automatically try to lower their velocity

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passing by its

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the safety of the students will likely

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than before.

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, its cost will restrict people

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the rule,

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, in some circumstances they will just leave it

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they have enough money to bear it. Even for some generations, it seems to have their

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to show

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off their power of money. They will easily do it without any concerns since they want the community

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it as a

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privilege

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self-awareness

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of each individual must be formed before they get the license. It could be attained from the particular trainings or workshops.

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nonetheless

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the penalty takes a good role in the

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rule of thumb, the other supporting methods should be applied

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it to create

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on the

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coherence cohesion

Enhance the logical structure to better connect ideas. Aim for seamless transitions between arguments and examples.

task achievement

Provide more comprehensive ideas with relevant and specific examples to fully support your argumentation.

coherence cohesion

Focus on grammar and spelling accuracy to improve clarity, though minor errors are acceptable to some extent.

introduction conclusion present

The essay introduces the topic and provides a clear position.

supported main points

Main points are present and generally supported with examples.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

for example
for instance
to illustrate this
to give a clear example
such as
namely
to illustrate
take, for example

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

280 words

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