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Some people believe that planing for the future is a waste of time because they think that focusing on the present is more important. To what extent do you agree or disagree. Angsa

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It is held belief that focusing on the current
time
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 is more crucial than planning your
future
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.
Nevertheless
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, I totally disagree with
this
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 perspective, and I value planning in advance and
to be
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being
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 prepared for
future
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 events.
This
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 essay will explain my opinion and some examples will be included.
To begin
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 with, Individuals who set
a clear plans
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a clear plan
clear plans
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 in order to achieve their goals will certainly accomplish these targets.
However
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, achieving these goals
require
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requires
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 various elements
such
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 as determination, dedication, and
sacrificing
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sacrifice
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.
For example
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, if a law graduate aims to be a certified lawyer, he/she must dedicate a substantial amount of their
time
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 in handling different cases each day for a long period of
time
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, which
is
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apply
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may isolate or
affects
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affect
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 their social life. Another point to consider is that every successful individual who
organise
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organises
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 their way of living
advise
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advises
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 that, in order to
fulfill
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fulfil
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 your dreams; you need to set a clear path that involves small steps
lead
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that lead
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 to personal growth and fulfilment; which
assist
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assists
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 ambition people to observe real results
as well as
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 avoiding negative changes in the distant horizon. It is
also
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 possible to say that studies and statistics
also
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 demonstrated that any individual who is hesitating about the
future
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 and
have
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has
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 a distracted mind, will not succeed in their lives, and they will face several obstacles and difficulties. In conclusion, despite people having different points of view, I tend to believe that planning for the
future
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 is significant to achieve massive accomplishments in your life in a short period of
time
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task achievement
Develop some of your examples more fully. For instance, when talking about the law graduate, you could include more specific details about the kinds of sacrifices they might need to make or how such dedication can tangibly lead to success.
coherence cohesion
Improve coherence by ensuring your ideas link more seamlessly between sentences and paragraphs. Using more cohesive devices and ensuring each paragraph logically follows the last will help.
introduction conclusion present
Your introduction clearly presents your stance on the issue and gives the reader an idea of what to expect from the essay.
logical structure
You have clearly stated your opinion and organized your essay with a logical introduction, body, and conclusion structure.
supported main points
You attempt to support your points with examples, which is important for strengthening arguments, even though they could be more developed.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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