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You have recently left something in a train, write a letter to the manager of lost and found department and specify. • When you lost it? – travelling from Banff to ---- • Describe the object you have left- Camera, canon, black • Tell the manager what you want them to do with it- find it and send it back

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Dear Manager, I hope you are doing well. I am writing
this
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 letter to
request
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ask
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 if you can find my
canon
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Canon
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camera
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 which I lost during my travelling. My name is Darsh Patel. It was about a week ago, on
25th
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the 25th
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 of December, at 9:00 AM, I was travelling to
banff
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Banff
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 from
calgary
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Calgary
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 by train with my family. Unfortunately, I lost my black colour canon
camera
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, which was given by my parents on my 20th birthday. I just remember that I was capturing
the
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apply
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photos of nature during our journey.
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, when we reached
to
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the
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apply
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Banff, in
hurry
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a hurry
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, I forgot to take a
camera
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 with me.
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, I kindly request you to find my
camera
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 as it was precious
for
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to
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 me. I would appreciate
if
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it if
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 you could find my
camera
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 and send it back to me or I can pick it up from your department. You can reach out
on
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at
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 999-987-9876.
This
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 is my mobile number. I look forward to your understanding and response on
this
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 matter. Yours Sincerely, Darsh

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task achievement
Try to provide a more detailed description of the camera, such as the model number or any distinct features it may have.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph clearly serves a distinct purpose to enhance coherence.
coherence cohesion
The greeting and closing are polite and appropriately formal for this type of letter.
task achievement
The tone of the letter is suitable for a formal request, showing politeness and urgency.
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