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Task1: The table shows information about metro systems in six different cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Task1: The table shows information about metro systems in six different cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table compares
between
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apply
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underground systems in six different cities
over
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all over
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 the world. The data includes
a
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the
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number
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 of
lines
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, total length in miles, the
number
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 of annual journeys and the cost of a single fare in US dollars.
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, it can be noted that Beijing and Tokyo subways have the lowest fees and a higher
number
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 of trips every year. New York City has the longest system and a higher
number
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 of
lines
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. New York and Bejing systems are the longest covering 659 and 357 miles with 24 and 19
lines
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, respectively.
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, the Beijing metro does times more trips and costs one-fifth the price of that of New York. London tube comes third in total length but has only 11
lines
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 and each ticket cost$ 7.30 which makes it the most expensive underground system. Tokyo and Mexico City subways have a similar
number
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 of
lines
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 and total mile coverage,
however
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, Mexico City does half the
number
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 of annual trips for a fraction of the price compared to Tokyo.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, lines with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "compares" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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