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The table below shows the percentage of students participating in different extracurricular activities in three schools (A, B, and C) in 2023.

The table below shows the percentage of students participating in different extracurricular activities in three schools (A, B, and C) in 2023.
The table provides key information about the percentage of students participating in different extracurricular activities in three
schools
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 in 2023. The units are measured in percentages.
Overall
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, it is clear from the table that sports had the highest
participation
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 across all
schools
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,
whereas
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 drama had the lowest in
school
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C
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.
In addition
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, music and art club
participation
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 varied between
schools
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.
According to
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 what is shown, sports
participation
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 was highest in
school
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C
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 (50%),
while
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schools
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 A and
B
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 had slightly lower figures (40% and 35%, respectively). Music had a moderate level of
participation
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, with
school
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 A at 30%, followed by
school
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B
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 (25%) and
school
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C
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 (20%) In terms of drama,
school
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B
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 had the highest percentage (20%),
while
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school
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C
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 had the lowest (10%). Art club
participation
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 was equal in
schools
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B
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 and
C
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 (20%) but slightly lower in
school
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 A (15%)

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 82%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words schools, participation, school, c, b with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Extracurricular activities
  • Holistic development
  • Teamwork
  • Leadership skills
  • Student engagement
  • School resources
  • Cultural emphasis
  • Student satisfaction
  • Academic performance
  • School reputation
  • Socioeconomic factors
  • Participation rates
  • Traditional activities
  • Modern trends
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