The table below shows employment patterns for males and females in New Zealand in 1993 and 2003. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows employment patterns for males and females in New Zealand in 1993 and 2003. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The table below shows employment patterns for males and females in New Zealand in 1993 and 2003. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table compares the patterns of employment for people of both genders in New Zealand in four sectors. The comparison is made between 2003 and 2004 in three different categories.
Overall
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, manufacturing, building and services followed a similar pattern showing a rise in the categories of difficulties in finding skilled workers and finding unskilled employees and a drop in the third area.
In contrast
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, the commerce zone showed a decline in all three parts. First of all, in 2003, the secondary sector faced problems of 45% in looking for experts to work which was 6% lower than the year later. The building and services part faced a similar predicament at 45% in 2004 being 3% and 4% more than the previous year. The trade sector experienced a fall from 47% to 41%. The same pattern was noticed for unskilled workmen with manufacturing peaking at 26% followed by commerce being 4% lower. Services were the lowest at 20% and rose by 9% in 2004
while
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building had an increase of 2% amounting to 23%.
However
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, the business division was the only one with a reduction of 3%.
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, the issue was the minimum for technical workers in both the years, being not more than 14% in 2003 and 10% in 2004 in the
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department. The Economics sector faced no dilemma at all in 2004. It was the minimum at 2% the year before.

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