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The graph below shows the production levels of the main kinds of fuel in the UK between 1981 and 2000. Summarize the formation by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the production levels of the main kinds of fuel in the UK between 1981 and 2000. Summarize the formation by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph gives information about the
production
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 of petroleum, coal, and natural gas in
UK
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the UK
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 in 1981 and 2000.
Overall
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, it can be seen that petroleum
were
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was
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 widely used as
main
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the main
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fuels
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fuel
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 in the UK, followed by coal;
however
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,
this
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 declined in the period given and was replaced by natural gas as the second used fuel. Petroleum's
production
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 started at approximately 90
million
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tonnes
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 in 1981 and surged to 140
million
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tonnes
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 from 1984 to 1986;
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however
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however,
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 it decreased and grew dramatically in the
last
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 period
at
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to
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 140
million
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tonnes
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.
In contrast
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,
the
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apply
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coal produced 80
millions
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million
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tonnes
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 in 1981 and dramatically fell to approximately 39
million
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tonnes
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 in 1984, rose to 60
million
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tonnes
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 in 1986 and plummeted to less than 40
million
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tonnes
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 in 2000. Looking more at the data, natural gas
production
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 saw a rise
of
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in
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production
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 from 40
million
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tonnes
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 in 1981, it remained stable for ten years before it dramatically
peak
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peaked
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to
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at
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 10
million
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tonnes
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 in 2000.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words production, million, tonnes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "gives" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "dramatically" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • production levels
  • fuel types
  • trend
  • fluctuating
  • dominant
  • period
  • rise
  • decline
  • context
  • spikes
  • drops
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