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The map below shows the development of an area between 1995 and the present. Korkem.

The map below shows the development of an area between 1995 and the present. Korkem.
The map shows how an area has changed since 1995. All things considered, the building and the facilities in
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 region underwent several significant changes. The neighbourhood saw significant renovations, including the development of new
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commercial
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facilities
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 significant adjustments to existing residential housing. The most prominent change occurred in the farmland and forest park located on the eastern side. The farmland was integrated into the forest park, creating space for a golf area and tennis courts. Another noteworthy modification was the removal of the fishing port
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 At the moment, residential housing was more popular. New houses were constructed in the western part of the area.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 3 times.
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