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The chart below shows the different levels of post-school qualifications in Australia and the proportion of men and women who held them in 1999.

The chart below shows the different levels of post-school qualifications in Australia and the proportion of men and women who held them in 1999.
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The bar chart demonstrates the rate of men and women that have different post-school qualifications in Australia in 1999.
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it is clear that
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 males mainly had higher qualifications compared to females. It can be seen that men focused on achieving higher education
while
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 women focused on achieving just the basic education. Most of the skills were possessed by males except for undergraduate
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diploma
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diplomas
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 and bachelor’s
degree
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degrees
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. These credibilities were more popular amongst females. Approximately 70% had an undergraduate
diploma
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 and 54% had a bachelor’s degree.
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, roughly 92% of men had skilled a vocational
diploma
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, 70% had a postgraduate
diploma
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 and 60% had a master’s degree.

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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words diploma with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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