Some people believe that using modern technology (digital photographs, blogs) is the best way to record and remember important personal events. Others think traditional methods (making photo albums, writing diaries) are better. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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important events by digital photographs saves a lot of time.

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To improve task response, ensure that you address both views comprehensively and support them with specific examples or evidence. Clarify your own opinion as well.

coherence cohesion

Enhance coherence and cohesion by providing a clear structure with an introduction, body paragraphs for each view and a well-rounded conclusion.

coherence cohesion

Provide clear and concise main points to ensure logical progression, and connect ideas with linking words/phrases between sentences and paragraphs.

task achievement

The essay clearly introduces the topic by presenting both views on the use of technology versus traditional methods for recording personal events.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

2 paragraphs

86 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

digital photographs
blogs
photo albums
writing diaries
memory preservation
real-time capture
social engagement
space-saving solution
customization
photo editing
multimedia integration
tactile experience
personal connection
emotional connection
data loss
digital failure
obsolescence
traditional methods
modern technology
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