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The bar chart shows the percentage of school children learning to play different musical instruments in 2005, 2010 and 2015.

The bar chart shows the percentage of school children learning to play different musical instruments in 2005, 2010 and 2015.
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The aforementioned graph illustrates the proportion of students who play various instruments every five years.
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, there was a continuous increase in the amount of people playing the piano, guitar and drums;
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, the violin had an opposite trend. In 2005, approximately 12% played the piano, 11% played the guitar and 6% played the drums. In 2015,
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 gradually rose to 38%, 40% and 8% respectively. As for violin, there was an estimate of 10% in the Year 2005.
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 decreased to 6% in the Year 2015.

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