IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 8

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. A good friend has just changed schools and is having difficulty fitting in and needs your advice. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter • make suggestions as to how they could make friends • suggest joining clubs, participating in school activities • give any extra general advice

Hi John, I hope you're doing well! I am writing
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 letter to give you some suggestions on the current situation that you have been facing since you were admitted to another institute. First of all, life will not remain the same all the
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, So change is necessary. All you have to do is to talk with other students in a formal or informal way. You will feel a pure connection with others when you devote your precious
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 to them.
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, you should make some effort into other curriculum activities
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 as joining a discussion club or a library.
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, In your leisure
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 participate in an indoor or outdoor stadium near your area. I know it must be very hard to make new friends when changing a school, but
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 is the only
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 when a person can develop innocent friendships. All you have to do is to remain serene in odd situations. I'm sure you will cope with small hurdles by yourself. I will catch up with you very soon. Best wishes, Harpreet

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coherence cohesion
Ensure each paragraph presents a clear and distinct idea. The second paragraph could better focus on one suggestion instead of multiple brief mentions.
task achievement
For task achievement, make sure you fully develop your ideas. Each suggestion can be expanded with specific examples or explanations.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • empathy
  • approachable
  • initiate
  • common interests
  • align with
  • participation
  • volunteer
  • committees
  • build relationships
  • patient
  • discouraged
  • positive attitude
  • support
  • encouragement
  • adaptability
  • networking
  • socialize
  • interactive
  • extracurricular
  • inclusivity
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