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Today more and more tourist or visiting places where conditions are difficult, such as sahara desert or the Antarctic. What are the advantages and disadvantages for tourist who visit such places?

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today's era, it
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 discovered that most
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the
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tourist
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tourists
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 like to visit
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places
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 that
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 very adverse
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conditions. some of them
includes
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the sahara
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sahara
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Sahara
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 desert, mount
everest
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or
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and
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 the
antarctic
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 regions. visiting these kinds of
places
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 has both positive and negative effects which
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diccused
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discussed
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following
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the following
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 paragraphs. In order to explain the positive
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effect
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, the foremost is exposure and a different kind of
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 experience.
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 visiting
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different
places
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 which are very challenging, an individual
get
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 a different type of
life
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 experience and a new exposure which later on helps to motivate to go on their
life
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 more enthusiastically and freshly.
this
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 type of
exposures
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exposure
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also
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give
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 them a positive
turns
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freshen
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 up their thoughts that everything is possible if they are very eager to
achive
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achieve
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doing
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making
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 some
efforts
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effort
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.
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,
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 kind of spirit in
life
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 helps the person to do some daring things that
helps
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 to make an individual,
s
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's
 mindset stronger.
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thoughts
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, most
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people make world records by visiting the most challenging
places
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 in the world and it
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created
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person
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a person
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,
s
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's
life
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. Like the coin has both sides.
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 has some negative points. one of them is risking their
life
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. most
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the
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people actually risk their
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life
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lives
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 to chase the most difficult
places
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.
the
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 example of
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 is climbing
mount everst
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Mount Everst
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 or visiting
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places
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 that have very harsh climatic
condition
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conditions
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 and
unbearable
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are unbearable
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 to the human body. risking their
life
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in
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sake
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the sake
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to
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 exposure is probably not a good idea.
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recent
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a recent
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 survey conducted by WHO, about 1 in 10
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his
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life
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due to
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 difficult climatic conditions
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traveling
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travelling
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.
To conclude
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this
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, by taking some safety measures and appropriate training, the risk factor would be decreased and people will even enjoy the daring moments of
life
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. Train your body
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 the climatic conditions ahead would be one of the most effective
method
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methods
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 for travelling to the
places
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 like
sahara
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Sahara
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desset
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dessert
desert
that
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which
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 have extremely high temperatures and
antarctic
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Antarctic
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 regions with
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a temperature
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temperature
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temperatures
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 of -60 degrees.

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Grammar
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Task Achievement
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Coherence
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Structure
Ensure each paragraph is developed with a clear, single idea. Separate different thoughts into new paragraphs.
Structure
The essay presents a clear introduction and conclusion, outlining the main points to be discussed.
Task Achievement
The response adequately addresses both sides of the argument, discussing advantages and disadvantages.
Coherence
There is a thoughtful attempt to explain the advantages of visiting challenging tourist destinations.

Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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